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23 June 2008 @ 12:25 pm
Fic Request Fulfilled for franlock  
Title: A Summer Dance
Author: charma_10
Beta: queenb23more
Rating: G
Word count: 1,362
Summary: Ron and Hermione share their first dance.
Warnings: DH spoilers
Notes: Thanks for the beta Shannon! And thanks to JoAnn for the extension. My life has been madness this week! To my recipient: I’m sorry it’s not PG, I know I’m lame for doing that but I had a fic and I re-read it and it turned out way too angsty and then I lost most of it due to my stupid computer so I went the other way. This is very light on the angst, but I hope you like it all the same :)

Although his invitation had been anything but romantic, Hermione was still thrilled to be exactly where she was at that moment in time.

It had started quite awkwardly, neither of them wanting to be the first to touch the other, but Ron had taken charge by placing a hand on her waist and grabbing her hand with the other. Still feeling slightly shocked that he had asked her to dance, Hermione remained silent and put her free hand on his shoulder. They hadn’t moved for a few moments and it felt like an eternity before Ron started leading and the two of them were dancing. Finally.

The first few songs had been upbeat numbers, so their carefully constructed stance had fallen apart quite quickly. Hermione was fairly certain she hadn’t laughed so hard in her entire life. To her surprise, Ron was an enthusiastic dancer. His arms flailed about erratically at times and he stood on her feet more than once, but it was Ron, and they were having fun and that was all that mattered. She was feeling dizzy because he had spun her around so much. She was also sure her feet were blistering, and she was almost certain that she should probably sit down and have a break soon, but she didn’t want to let go.

They were moving all over the makeshift dance floor, past George and Angelina, and Fred, who had cornered Ginny for a dance and had her hoisted up over his shoulder, giggling loudly. Then, as the beat slowed, they’d found themselves in a dim corner of the yard, away from most of the guests, staring at one another, their hands still clutched tightly and their breaths coming in exhausted pants.

As they stood looking at each other, Hermione could feel her heart thudding in her chest and wondered if he could hear it too, and if he could, whether he would know what it meant.

“One more?” she asked meekly, sure that her voice was shaking as uncontrollably as her hand.

“Absolutely,” Ron replied quickly, but neither of them moved. Hermione wasn’t sure she could. Luckily for her, Ron must have been feeling fairly confident because he once again took the lead, this time gently placing both of his hands on her waist. He was shaking a little, and for that, Hermione was grateful. She clearly wasn’t the only one who was a little bit nervous at this unchartered territory. She reached her arms up and hooked them around his neck, thinking for a moment that he must have grown even taller over the summer because it was quite uncomfortable, her arms stretched to their limit, barely touching behind his neck. She could feel the thin wisps of hair on the nape of his neck and was glad Mrs. Weasley hadn’t cut his hair so short this time because the sensation was unbelievable. Her fingers were tingling quite intensely and when she finally had the courage to look up, she saw his eyes were closed. She realised what she had been doing and pulled her fingers away, embarrassed by her brazen actions.

“Don’t stop,” he murmured, his voice incredibly soft and low. “I don’t want anything to wreck this.” Hermione nodded, replacing her hands, finding that the two of them had started moving together, ever so slightly, to the music. They weren’t really in time at all with the song playing, choosing to move much slower and more deliberate.

Sod the music, thought Hermione, immensely enjoying the moment. She wasn’t sure when they would get a chance like this again, or if Ron would even want to do something like this again. He had shifted so his cheek was resting against her hair and his thumbs were lightly rubbing the side of her waist, and even though she had promised herself she wouldn’t, she had began to anticipate what could happen next. Her mind wandered to thoughts of kissing and tingling lips and wondering whether his time with Lavender had done him good and that when they kissed, they wouldn’t look like they were eating each other uncontrollably, but that to outsiders, it would look just right. She was so caught up in her thoughts that she barely even noticed that Ron was trying to talk to her.

“Sorry, pardon?” she asked somewhat airily, inwardly cringing with how much she sounded like Parvati Patil.

“I was just asking,” said Ron, leaning down so he was whispering in her ear, “how the skinny ankles were holding up?” Hermione rested her forehead on his shoulder, hiding her grin.

“Your Aunt Muriel is really something, isn’t she?” she asked, not expecting Ron to answer.

“She’s barmy, that’s what she is. Your ankles are not skinny, nor do you have too much hair--”

“She said that?” squealed Hermione in surprise, causing Ron to stiffen and splutter.

“But you don’t! And I told her that. Told her she was completely wrong and too damn fussy. Said you probably know more stuff than her too,” he said proudly. He looked at her in surprise when she hit him playfully on the arm. “What?” he asked, genuinely confused.

“You told your Aunt Muriel, that a seventeen-year-old, Muggle-born witch with skinny ankles and too much hair knows more than her?” Hermione asked incredulously, and it didn’t take long for Ron to get her point.

“Oh—OH!” he exclaimed in horror, casting a glance towards the tables and spotting his Aunt talking to Harry and an old wizard. “Well I’m disinherited then, aren’t I?” he added jokingly, and Hermione rolled her eyes.

“You’ve turned out just fine not having money thrown at you at every turn, Ron Weasley. You don’t need her money,” said Hermione confidently. She almost regretted her words when she saw something flicker across Ron’s eyes but relaxed when he smiled.

“Thanks,” he said quietly and once again, pulled her tightly towards him. “Let’s keep dancing.” Hermione hadn’t even noticed they’d stopped and was quick to agree.

“You’re quite good at this. I wouldn’t have guessed,” she said lightly, and rested her head back on his shoulder.

“I got Ginny to teach me before you and Harry got here. Mum said if I didn’t dance, I’d have to de-gnome the garden for the rest of my life, so I asked Ginny and she said that she would help me because she didn’t want me to ruin your shoes by standing on your feet all night.” Hermione could feel the skin on his neck burning through his robes and thought that his face must be a vivid shade of red if she could feel it through clothes.

“Just my feet?” she asked, curious. Ron shuffled a bit before replying.

“Well, I was hardly going to dance with anyone else, was I?” he replied, as if the answer had been obvious. Deciding not to embarrass him further, Hermione changed the subject.

“Do you think he’ll want to leave tomorrow?” she asked, though she already knew the answer. Ron nodded.

“I wouldn’t be surprised.”

“Are you scared, Ron?” she prodded, wanting to know she wasn’t alone in her apprehension.

“Terrified,” he mumbled, taking a lock of her hair and curving it around his finger. “But we’ll be fine. We have to be.” Hermione nodded.

“We’ll be fine.” In the background, another fast song started to play loudly and, with the moment gone, they pulled away from each other.

“This was good,” said Ron and he hugged her tightly.

“We’ll do it again?” she asked and he nodded.

“Definitely. Suppose we should go find Harry. We’ve been gone a while,” he added as an afterthought. Hermione nodded.

“I might just go get a drink first. Did you want one?” Ron took her hand and squeezed it quickly.

“You go find Harry. I’ll get the drinks.” Hermione nodded again and Ron dropped her hand and started to walk away towards the table where the drinks were being served. When he was only a few steps away from her, he turned around and grinned.

“You’re staring,” he accused, raising his eyebrows. Deciding it was time to be bold, Hermione smiled widely and nodded.

“Absolutely.”

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ORIGINAL REQUEST
Briefly
describe what you'd like to receive:

Preferred Genre(s): General/Fluff with a bit of angst
Preferred Rating(s): PG/PG-13
Canon or AU?: Cannon!
A specific you want: Deathly Hallows missing moment or a fic soon after it. I wouldn't mind a prego fic either.
Deal Breakers (what don't you want?): Ron/Hermione sex, too much angst/fluff, excessive quirkiness


Thanks for participating in the Love in Full Bloom Exchange!
 
 
 
drcjsniderdrcjsnider on June 23rd, 2008 04:38 pm (UTC)
ah... cute. I like speculating about what happened to Ron and Hermione during that dance. :)
charma_10charma_10 on June 24th, 2008 12:35 am (UTC)
Thanks very much
Nataliefallendaydreams on June 23rd, 2008 11:34 pm (UTC)
I just freakin' drowned in mush. xD

I love mush! <3
you made it amazing. gracias!
charma_10charma_10 on June 24th, 2008 12:35 am (UTC)
Ahh I hope it wasn't too mushy! I tried to have a bit of underlying angst there for the recipent. I'm glad you liked it though.
Nataliefallendaydreams on June 24th, 2008 03:17 am (UTC)
ah no it was poifect, amigo. :D I loved this quote:


He had shifted so his cheek was resting against her hair and his thumbs were lightly rubbing the side of her waist

I felt the angst. don't worry. =) My heart exploded with pleasure.
Rachel Smachel: velore//preview to book sevenfranlock on June 24th, 2008 02:05 am (UTC)
The dance scene was perfect! I loved all the tiny little details of the dance - It made it a lot more realistic and fun to read. I especially loved the awkwardness. Job well done! And thank you so much! It was great.
charma_10charma_10 on June 25th, 2008 03:30 am (UTC)
Thanks! The prompt just ran away from me! I hope you didn't think it was too fluffy. I had actually started a different one but by the time it had finished, it was a major angst fest and I didn't want to post it! I'm glad you liked it!
Rachel Smachel: velore//preview to book sevenfranlock on June 25th, 2008 03:13 pm (UTC)
No, no! It's cool. I only wanted a little angst and if that little angst didn't work into the grander scheme of things then that's cool. I'd rather have a natural fluffy fic then a forced angsty one. I really, really loved it.
Ms. Friday: Stripes equals lovei_am_girlfriday on June 24th, 2008 01:23 pm (UTC)
So many things to love about this story: Ron as an enthusiastic dancer, Hermione playing with his hair, and the last two lines!!!!!!

“You’re staring,” he accused, raising his eyebrows. Deciding it was time to be bold, Hermione smiled widely and nodded.

“Absolutely.”


Awesome. It's so sweet and romantic! *sigh*
charma_10charma_10 on June 25th, 2008 03:30 am (UTC)
I figured by then, Hermione may have become a little bit bolder in her dealing with Ron.

I loved writing Hermione playing with Ron's hair too!

Thanks!
dransinha: Hermione & Rondransinha77 on June 24th, 2008 04:54 pm (UTC)
Oh, lovely dance!
And I loved the ending... :)
charma_10charma_10 on June 25th, 2008 03:31 am (UTC)
She is a bit cheeky, isn't she?

Thanks for reading!
a little summer wind: just kateslam_girl on June 24th, 2008 05:18 pm (UTC)
Nice missing moment. I think we've all wondered what went on during that dance. ^^ I liked their banter in this, felt very them. And I loved Hermione's line at the end :D
charma_10charma_10 on June 25th, 2008 03:32 am (UTC)
I think you are right. We have all wondered. I personally wanted Krum giving Ron a reason to deck him, but this will have to do!

Thanks
Me: RHr | CorkArt Kisshpuckle on June 25th, 2008 11:13 pm (UTC)
This was absolutely perfect! ♥

xxx
charma_10charma_10 on June 30th, 2008 06:44 am (UTC)
Thanks!
Snarky Journalist from Hecklire_casander on June 29th, 2008 12:51 pm (UTC)
I really liked this story, it was so sweet!
charma_10charma_10 on June 30th, 2008 06:44 am (UTC)
Thanks :)
Margot: Ron/Hermionemidnight_birth on July 1st, 2008 04:56 am (UTC)
Wow! This was incredibly well written!! :D It's really very hard to take a moment or a scene that in reality lasts about 3 minutes and turn it into a wonderful, flowing, eloquent, elaborate story. You've done just that, and so very well, and I really admire that! :D

It was so sweet, sincere and open even I got nervous butterflies in my stomach on their behalf. :) Your power of description worked miracles here. It was just so real, and that's what touched me most about it.

I also adored that it was subtle. They didn't get together, and there was no complete obviousness in everything they did, but it was sweet and their true feelings were perfectly clear. It had more romance than a lot of fics where they get together/are together.

On to favorite lines.

As they stood looking at each other, Hermione could feel her heart thudding in her chest and wondered if he could hear it too, and if he could, whether he would know what it meant. --> I love this line! It's very realistic and sweet.

Her mind wandered to thoughts of kissing and tingling lips and wondering whether his time with Lavender had done him good and that when they kissed, they wouldn’t look like they were eating each other uncontrollably, but that to outsiders, it would look just right. --> This is wonderful!! It's exactly what would be going through anyone's mind in the situation, and it was going through mine as I was reading it.

“You told your Aunt Muriel, that a seventeen-year-old, Muggle-born witch with skinny ankles and too much hair knows more than her?” Hermione asked incredulously, and it didn’t take long for Ron to get her point.

“Oh—OH!” he exclaimed in horror, casting a glance towards the tables and spotting his Aunt talking to Harry and an old wizard. “Well I’m disinherited then, aren’t I?” he added jokingly, and Hermione rolled her eyes.
--> This was my very favorite exchange!! I laughed for so long, it's hilarious!!

“I got Ginny to teach me before you and Harry got here. Mum said if I didn’t dance, I’d have to de-gnome the garden for the rest of my life, so I asked Ginny and she said that she would help me because she didn’t want me to ruin your shoes by standing on your feet all night.” --> I just literally melted! So sweet and funny, but wonderful!! :D

Hats off to you for a job well done! One thing, though. You may want to ask the mod, maybe, to fix it up for you, because it seems you've forgotten to close an Italics tag somewhere in the middle, and it's all cursive half-way through until the end.
charma_10charma_10 on July 1st, 2008 06:56 am (UTC)
Wow, just thanks so much! I love reviews like this that really get in there and let you know the good and the bad and particular things that worked and what didn't. As an author I appreciate it so much.

I'll have to get on that fix up though. Thanks for letting me know.
xbiankisxxbiankisx on July 17th, 2008 04:08 am (UTC)
awww how cute i hadnt read fanfic with hermione and ron and its super! lol
charma_10charma_10 on July 17th, 2008 06:58 pm (UTC)
Thanks :)
xbiankisxxbiankisx on July 18th, 2008 01:33 am (UTC)
if u have any good ron/hermione recommendations plz tell me!!! =D
Alex: for all the love we've madestormsandsins on July 17th, 2008 10:56 pm (UTC)
"Aww" is all I can say right now. Aww!
charma_10charma_10 on July 18th, 2008 08:46 pm (UTC)
*loves you*

Thanks mate ;)

Have you read After the Battle? I was insane and wrote 2 for this exchange :S
Alexstormsandsins on July 18th, 2008 10:00 pm (UTC)
Yes, yes I did. I think I actually read it maybe last week but didn't comment because of hovering!boss. I commented yesterday, though. Beautiful :)